Friends are Always There.
02/04/2020
An Experience with a Friend
By: Dylan Fayerman
“A real friend is one who walks in when the rest of the world walks out.”
– Walter Winchell
Life without a friend to ride with, is a life not lived. The mountains of New Hampshire are fun to ride, and especially when weather permits. My friend and I decided to go biking in New Hampshire on a very challenging mountain biking course. I went with my friend named Phillip.
We have known each other for over seven years, and we do almost everything together. The weather on the Thursday afternoon was sunny, and the temperature was a warm 71 degrees. When we arrived to the mountain I saw a thick forest, with hills of sand, and gravel. We got our bikes out of the car, said goodbye to our parents for the day, and started our day long adventure.
Afterwards my friend helped me up, and comforted me. Even at a time of failure, a true friend is always there for you. The true ones will stick around, and ride by your side. Friendships are the only glue in this world. The glue that keeps the world together.
This is a really great piece Dylan! It is well written and you described this story really well.
Posted by: Rory Kennealy | 02/21/2020 at 06:15 AM
This was a very cool experience, and even with a very brief head and heart you managed to convey your point well and show that friendship possesses. It was also cool to see your split conclusion, with two sentences latching together to create suspense and meaning.
Posted by: Nick Brady | 02/21/2020 at 06:23 AM
Great narrative voice! I could see the big sand hill. Sounds like a good friendship! Great work. Well written.
Posted by: Eli Zahavi | 02/21/2020 at 06:28 AM
I am quite sure you have mentioned Phillip in one of your blog posts, and he seems to be a good friend of yours. I liked the intense story you described, and how friendship tied into helping you try something new.
Posted by: Yoni Ghansah | 02/21/2020 at 06:35 AM
I am quite sure you have mentioned Phillip in one of your blog posts, and he seems to be a good friend of yours. I liked the intense story you described, and how friendship tied into helping you try something new.
Posted by: Yoni Ghansah | 02/21/2020 at 06:35 AM
As a mountain biker myself, I understand the struggle that you went through after falling. Nobody likes to fall, but you always have to get back up. It nice seeing how Phillip helped you get back up instead of just watching you. That is a true friend. Great job.
Posted by: Sean L | 02/23/2020 at 05:00 AM
Great use of essential details in your setup. I love how you stated the danger of the sand hills before the climax (your bike falling). This foreshadowing kept me engaged. It is difficult to express the power of friendship, but you manage to do it beautifully through words, especially in your head and heart/conclusion. Great work.
Posted by: Oliver Ali | 02/23/2020 at 11:25 AM
This story was a very descriptive tale of rising and falling (literally) and it really demonstrated your friendship with Phillip in a great way. Amazing Job!
Posted by: Max LG | 02/23/2020 at 11:39 AM
The descriptive element of this piece was very well thought out. The experience of falling and getting back up was very relatable.
Posted by: Will S. | 02/23/2020 at 01:58 PM
I can really relate to this, it’s really cool that even though your friend is so much better than you at something. Instead of being a jerk, they helped you get better and recover.
Posted by: Colin Soukup | 02/23/2020 at 03:59 PM
I liked that it was clear that this experience meant a lot to you, and that you were able to remember, or maybe just guess, the exact temperature outside, overall, it added to an already great story.
Posted by: William O'Malley | 02/23/2020 at 06:34 PM
Great story Dylan! You used a good theme tied into an interesting story, which made it an all around good read. Great job!
Posted by: Ethan Rich | 02/24/2020 at 02:52 PM