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Mara Haiku portfolio

Mara Haiku Portfolio

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Zeno 

 

I have only written haiku poems a couple times in my life, and thought the only way to do them is 5 syllables for the first line, 7 syllables for the second line, then 5 syllables for the last line, but I was wrong. I finally learned how to actually write good haikus and good techniques to help me with it. The three techniques I learned were great for me because I could memorize all of them because there are only three.

I think I did a good job on this assignment because I followed all the directions, and I put in a good effort. I tried to get better at the three techniques so that I could try and master them. I can definitely get better at the third technique because it is a little tough for me to narrow down my poem.

Overall I think I did a great job writing my haikus because I was putting in great effort and trying to improve them to make them better. I am glad I could finally learn the proper way to write a haiku which I am happy for. I will keep trying to improve my haiku skills and will never forget the three techniques.

Next time I will try to make my poems better by using better vocabulary and better descriptive words. I will try to do a better job surprising the reader with an even bigger twist at the end. I think that once I do these things my poems will be great. Overall I think I did a good job on my poems and had a good time writing them.

Fall

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The orange and yellow leave
Bunched together
Until they get crushed

~ Colby Mara

 

I used the second technique which is image on an image then a twist at the end. I had a good time writing this haiku poem. I like writing these poems because there’s no wrong way to do it, and you don’t have to worry about having 5, 7, then 5 syllables. I did a good job on this and enjoyed doing it which I usually don’t enjoy doing but I am. I am trying to get better at writing haikus and I finally learned how to properly write.

 

Fall


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The trees are now naked
Nothing to cover them up
Until spring time

~ Colby Mara

 

I used the first technique which is image plus a twist at the end.I do think I am getting better at haikus and I am trying to follow Fitz's techniques so I can write a really good one. I do think I rushed a little with this one because it only took a couple minutes for me to think of something, then I wrote it down and said it was done. Next time I write another haiku I am going to try and really make it my best one by putting in maximum effort.

 

Fall


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In the front yard
On the steps of the door
Is the last leaf of fall

~ Colby Mara 

 

I tried to use the third technique which is narrowing the poem down. I think I did a great job using this  technique because I narrowed down the poem to my front door step. I focused more on using the technique rather than having a good haiku. Next time I will try to do both so I can make the Best haiku possible. I enjoyed doing this though and will continue to get better.

 

Winter 

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The white blanket
Coating everything white
Until spring time

~ Colby Mara

 

I used image, image, then a twist at the end. This is my favorite technique because I like putting a random twist at the end that the reader is not expecting. Writing this poem about winter was very easy for me because I can picture it so much in my mind. I think this is the best haiku I’ve done yet because it makes sense in my mind.

 

Winter


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The sheet of ice
Lying on top of the lake
It’s skating time

~ Colby Mara 

    

I used an image, action, then a twist at the end. This worked well for me because I enjoy skating and writing about a lake freezing and being able to skate on it is amazing to me. That is why I think this haiku is pretty good because I can really picture it with my mind which makes it easier to write about.

 

Winter

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The one cardinal 
Hiding in the pine tree
Lying in its nest

~ Colby Mara

 

I used the first technique which is to narrow down your poem.I think I accomplished this because I started the poem very broad with one cardinal, then said where it is, then I gave a little more detail and said it was in its nest. Next time I do this I will try to narrow down the poem even more and will see how far I can narrow it down to. I do think I am getting better at this technique which I am happy for because I am trying to become a better writer.

 

Spring


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The fresh grass
Swaying to the wind
A hurricane!

~ Colby Mara

 

I used an image, action, then a twist at the end. I think I did a good job doing  this technique because I used the grass as my image, then the grass swaying in the wind as a action. Then used a twist and said a hurricane because it was windy. Next time I will try to come up with something a little better than grass so it's a little more exciting. Overall I think I did a pretty good job on this poem, but there’s definitely room to do better.

 

Spring


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Green is all I see
Everything in my yard
Every tree is green

~ Colby Mara

 

I tried to start broad and narrow it down but I don’t think I did a good job on this one. Next time I will really try and start as broad as I can and then narrow the poem down as much as I can. This poem only took a couple minutes so that is why it is not that good. I will do better on my next poem.

Spring


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Beautiful flowers
Flowers all colors
Until the bees are here

~ Colby Mara

 

I used an image which has beautiful flowers, then another image and said the flowers are all colors, then put a twist at the end and said until the bees come. I think I did a good job using this technique because I used two images and then put a twist that no one was expecting. I think I am getting better at haikus because I now know all the techniques, I just need to work on my wording.

Summer

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The hot sun
Staring me in the face
Scorching down on me 

~ Colby Mara

 

I tried to narrow the sun so it was on me. I think I accomplished this goal because I narrowed the sun down so it was on me. I like this poem because it reminds me of summer and I like the summer. I picked the sun because it is always hot in the summer.

 

Summer


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Waves crashing
Hot sand
A shark

~ Colby Mara

 

I used the first technique which is image, image, then a twist. I successfully did this because I described the waves crashing, the hot sand, then a shark which was the twist. I enjoy writing about summer because it's my favorite season. I thinkI am getting better at haikus because they are getting easier to write.

 

Summer


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The boat
Sailing into the fog
Where’d he go

~ Colby Mara

 

I used the second technique which is image, action, then a twist. I think I did a good job using this technique because I used an image, an action, then a twist. As my last haiku I tried to do my best work. I put a lot of thought into this poem and wanted it to make sense at the same time.

Comments

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Jacoby Garber

I really liked your haiku on the sun. I feel like it always staring me in my face. Awesome job on your portfolio.

Thomas Doherty

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Thomas Doherty

I’m just kidding. You really did a great job with the cool twist they really were some cool twist, my favorite poem was the one about summer where out of no where you just said a shark. Great job keep it up.

Evren Khan

You had good formatting and picture selection. My favorite poem was the one about snow on the trees. I like how you said blanketed; it really made it easy to visualize. Good job.

Max B

Your formatting was good and I liked the pictures you chose to accompany your haiku. I like the haiku about the hurricane. Well done.

Ethan

You had some very good haikus all throughout your portfolio but my personal favorite would have to be your final one about the boat. I like how you left the ending up to interpretation by saying “where’d he go”. Good work Colby.

Max

My favorite haiku was the one about how everything is green. Even though winter may be my favorite season, I still love to look around and see everything is lush and green. Every haiku is well-written, understandable and enjoyable. My one nitpick is the stock image bar at the bottom of the stairs image.

Zach Zipoli

I liked your poem about how the trees are naked until spring time, it showed how bare winter is and illustrated it very well. Nice job on everything!

Charllie Hood

For the most part formatting was consistent and well kept. My favorite poem of yours was definitely your last one. Its your most descriptive and your kereji/cool twist really left a whole lot of interpretation up to the reader.

Jake Fahey

My favorite haiku was your last one about a boat. I liked how you ended the haiku leaving the reader thinking. The haiku also showed that mystery can be used throughout a haiku I might start using that in my future haikus. Great Job!

The Fenn Voice

A nice portfolio, Colby. Good work on the haiku. One or two of them exceed the syllable limit, but all are creative, thoughtful and follow the techniques! This one is my favorite:

The boat
Sailing into the fog
Where’d he go

Thanks for a great effort!

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